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You said God made me perfect
The roundness of my hip, the softness of my lip
Gentle is my tip, I take you on every wild trip
So tighten your grip, squeeze me and take a sip
Get on my last ship, it is  time to tear and rip

My waves keep slamming your shore
Burning every sense in your core
Your nails on my side, always coming back for more
They take over every land, as we celebrate this war

You said God made me perfect
The size of my breast, where you built your nest
My wild birds on your chest , always flying west
The short breath is your guest, dancing, will never rest
Every touch  gives you my best, closer to my final quest
When the beauty of love rhymes. Missed writing in rhyme.
I k now this poem is too much, but I love it :love:




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asHix808 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow!!!!! thix is juxt WoW!!! wish i could do tht
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mrimade Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
how you doing that? :D , AMAZING O.O
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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sprinvntrdd Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Very nice work lady!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :bow:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012   General Artist
Hello there, super splendid saida! :huggle:
I really like how rhyme and rhythm are both masterfully maintained throughout the piece, beautiful job! :clap:
Also, it is wonderful how this piece is so seductive but in the most elegant and eloquent of manners. Not many poets can pull that off, so kudos to you, dear friend!
It is always such a joy to go through your gallery, thank goodness for your polls that serve as spectacular reminders. :love:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My dear :blowkiss:
Thank you so much for reading the poem :bow: I'm so happy you enjoyed this poem. Very honoured with your opinion :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012   General Artist
The pleasure is all mine, darling, believe me. :heart:
You and your works truly are most deserving of praise! :blowkiss:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That warms my hears :hug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012   General Artist
As it does mine :tighthug: :heart:
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