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You said God made me perfect
The roundness of my hip, the softness of my lip
Gentle is my tip, I take you on every wild trip
So tighten your grip, squeeze me and take a sip
Get on my last ship, it is  time to tear and rip

My waves keep slamming your shore
Burning every sense in your core
Your nails on my side, always coming back for more
They take over every land, as we celebrate this war

You said God made me perfect
The size of my breast, where you built your nest
My wild birds on your chest , always flying west
The short breath is your guest, dancing, will never rest
Every touch  gives you my best, closer to my final quest
When the beauty of love rhymes. Missed writing in rhyme.
I k now this poem is too much, but I love it :love:




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tommyboywood Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
i love good rhyme - pure poetry
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thaank you 
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asHix808 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow!!!!! thix is juxt WoW!!! wish i could do tht
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :)
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mrimade Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2013
how you doing that? :D , AMAZING O.O
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:blowkiss:
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sprinvntrdd Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013
Very nice work lady!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner May 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you :bow:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012   General Artist
Hello there, super splendid saida! :huggle:
I really like how rhyme and rhythm are both masterfully maintained throughout the piece, beautiful job! :clap:
Also, it is wonderful how this piece is so seductive but in the most elegant and eloquent of manners. Not many poets can pull that off, so kudos to you, dear friend!
It is always such a joy to go through your gallery, thank goodness for your polls that serve as spectacular reminders. :love:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My dear :blowkiss:
Thank you so much for reading the poem :bow: I'm so happy you enjoyed this poem. Very honoured with your opinion :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012   General Artist
The pleasure is all mine, darling, believe me. :heart:
You and your works truly are most deserving of praise! :blowkiss:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That warms my hears :hug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012   General Artist
As it does mine :tighthug: :heart:
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Kyla-Rose6 Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012
Not too much at all! Especially the second stanza, I thought it was so incredibly vivid, great job!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Nov 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading. Happy you enjoyed it :hug:
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LauraChan3 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
not too much at all! just the good amount of sensuality! and is full of joy!
I love rhymes too! :D the English langue is perfect for this kind of poetry
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy you think so :la: It seemed at first that people would think ıts too much rhyme. I'm happy you like it :nod:
Thank you for reading :hug:
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TeaHostessReema Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Love rhymes indeed! So erotic and a joy to read!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading my dear :hug:
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angelichope Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
I don't think this was too much; I thought it was lovely, and now that I think about it, I haven't written rhyming poetry in a while either!^^;
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm happy If I could make you write some rhyme poem :hug:
Thank you so much for reading my sweet friend :hug:
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angelichope Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
:huggle:
No prob, my sweeter friend!!!:heart:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I... well :blush: usually don't read such works but you have presented the "theme" beautifully AND subtly. Subtlety is always a major attribute in such poems since it presents you with the beauty of the words and does not well... give an excessively erotic touch to it. I haven't read many works like this so I may not be the best to comment but I love how you played with words (the first stanza almost gave a tingling sensation) :love:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading my friend. Really happy you think so. Happier you enjoyed it :aww:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome... ummm... since you are older what am I supposed to refer to you as? "my friend" would be fine or you recommend something else? :D
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Call me my friend or just Saida that is my name :)
What is your name ?
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah Sadia :) I hope that won't be rude to call you by your name! I am Saeed :)
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It 's not rude I'm not old :giggle: I'm just 25 :)
Good to meet you Saeed :handshake:
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NotenSMSK Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah... you seem a lot older too (I mean mature ;) it is not wise to say a woman looks old but i haven't seen you so i cannot comment) Glad to meet you too Sadia :heart: I hope we talk more often without paining your head :love:
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :giggle: I sound older :laughing:
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sdeana180 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012
sounds like somebody would thing about in heart break after a husband leaves them
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really didn't understand your comment:confused: I'm sorry, what did you mean?
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012   Writer
:+fav: Metaphors galore here to celebrate sensual sensations. I read this aloud and feel it more that way. It's "fixed form" because of the end rhymes, but I treat it as "Urban & Spoken Word." That's because I read all poetry aloud to 'feel' it and fall into it, if it works that way. This one does. On the screen it may lack a bit of rhythm, but aloud, not at all. You put readers right with you on "your final quest" and I'm glad I was a guest.
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading:bow: So happy you enjoyed it :)
I read poetry like that as well:highfive:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012   Writer
:) :iconwelcomeplz:
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bluecurse60 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2012
Terrific! I love the way each stanza has its own end rhyme. And I can only guess, to be frank coming right from a biology class last school term, that the "wild birds" are sperm. I don't know, maybe they are so abstract it is meant more as feelings instead of anything physical, haha. This poem is very upbeat too, great work!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading my dear :hug:
Wild birds, I said "My wild birds on your chest" I meant kisses:)
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bluecurse60 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2012
Oh! Wow, that was a funny misunderstanding!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: I guess, :hug:
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JinsSoulinWriting Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
WHOA O_______________O
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for reading:bow:
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JinsSoulinWriting Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yw that was very intricate and delicately written.
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much :bow:
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andreaseesstarz Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconpurplesparklesplz:You're featured here![link] :iconpurplesparklesplz:
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cristinewakesuphappy Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
hi. i'm sorry i'm probably the giver of lamest comments. so i use emoticons most of the time, for the lack of better words. anyway, a song said "you say it best when you say nothing at all..."

this poem has perfect rhymes and imagery. i miss writing in rhymes too, especially when the poems turn out good. :)
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You give me beautiful comments always. Don't worry about that:)
Thank you so much , I'm very happy you like it :bow:
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Darth-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012
beautiful, just beautiful! I think this is the best poem of love I've heard yet!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ow really :wow: I'm honoured with your words my dear. Thank you so much for reading :bow:
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Darth-Rose Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2012
Your welcome, I am now certain that it is the best love poem i've read yet because i've re-read all the others. Yours was the best!
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Mrs-Freestar-Bul Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm truly honoured :bow:
Thank you so much:hug:
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